Making them up as I go (2)

1. Tell the truth.
2. Entice, or fail.
3. To emphasize, summarize.
4. If it ain't short, it don't work.
5. Be clear.


And so I don't forget:
Don't explain. Just tell a story.
Don't argue. Just say things that make sense.
Expect people to be bored by the writing, and shorten it.
Make the wording easy to take.

Remove Loose Ends -- the interesting one-liners that go nowhere.

Thursday, July 16, 2020

Word order

From ABC News: Fauci fires back at White House aide who trashed him in op-ed
Subtitle: "Let's stop this nonsense," Fauci said.
by Ben Gittleson, July 15, 2020.

This sentence:
Over the weekend, the White House provided several media outlets with a misleading list of comments made by Fauci, in an effort to undercut him.

Note: "a misleading list of comments"

I think they mean to say "a list of misleading comments", which would mean that Fauci's comments were misleading, or were thought to be misleading by the White House.

As written, the statement means ABC News finds the list of comments misleading.

2 comments:

Michael Leddy said...

I think ABC did mean to say that it’s a misleading list. Fauci made statements that turn out to have been mistaken (because doctors and researchers now know more), but he wasn’t trying to mislead anyone. The misleadingness is on the part of the White House, presenting, for instance, Fauci’s statement that people didn’t have to change their daily routines but omitting the warning that followed — that with different circumstances guidelines would have to change.

The Arthurian said...

Okay. But here's another one, from Google News:
False list of 'home treatments' for COVID-19 circulates online

What is a "false list"? It's not really a list? I prefer:
List of false 'home treatments' for COVID-19 circulates online.